Haiku No. 433: Which?

Posted on July 4, 2018 by learning to live like water

silhouettes

Your gaze meets my eyes
It tells me what’s on your mind
Desire or disdain?

By Deborah E. Dayen

Picture from Pinterest

5 responses to “Haiku No. 433: Which?”

trE says:

July 4, 2018 at 6:50 pm

I love this, Deb! Did you mean for the first line to have 4 syllables? I

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- learning to live like water says:
  
  July 4, 2018 at 7:06 pm
  
  Ummmmm. No. 😳. Thank you for catching that!!! Glad you liked it. 😊
  
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  - trE says:
    
    July 4, 2018 at 7:20 pm
    
    No worries. It reads fine the way it is. Just asking because some people to tweak the syllables a bit. It’s definitely worth the read. But your haiku always are. Happy 4th!
    
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    - learning to live like water says:
      
      July 4, 2018 at 8:08 pm
      
      Thanks trE! Hope yours has been good. We’re heading to the fireworks shortly!
      
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      - trE says:
        
        July 4, 2018 at 8:10 pm
        
        You’re most welcome! Enjoy! I live about 5 minutes away (driving) from Downtown. I’ll hear them when they set them off. See them too. Make plenty of memories. 😊
        
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