Gliding in moonlight
Floating with sun in my eyes
Pliable, content.
Riding on ebb tide
Let the water carry me
Trust it knows its way.
Old pain receding
Water soothing my tired soul
Renewing my joy
By Deborah E. Dayen
Picture from Google Images
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That was lovely, and water like flowing…
There were 6 in the first line. Also I took the liberty of removing in my head a lot of ‘the’ from yours and one word change to make the count. To me ‘thes’ seemed to spoil your wonderful imagery and atmospheric watery flow..
anyway for you to see.
Gliding in moonlight
Floating with sun in my eyes
Pliable, content
Riding on the tide
Let water carry me far
Trust it knows its way
Old pain receding
Water soothes my aching soul
Renewing my joy
Anita. I love your version. I had this one in word for a few days and impulsively decided to post it today, thinking I was done. But wasn’t, as you so graciously showed me. Thank you my friend. Think I’ll go correct it. 😊💗
Ok, cool. I didn’t want to step on anything – but it was so lovely. Your counting still sucks though, maybe the sun will help…
Lol. I am so distracted. Seriously. At the moment. I couldn’t even write for a few days, at least nothing that was postable. My thoughts wouldn’t form. Too many mixed emotions. I’m sure when I get resettled it will all ease up.
Well, yes you havea a lot going on. Your mind wont allow you to boil over, don’t push it. I have been enjoying ur updates though and oo its nearly happening!
Trust it knows it’s (its) way.
Very nice. 😉
Ooops. But glad you liked it. I don’t know why I can’t get its and it’s squared away.
No worries. It really is so easy to forget or overlook (its/it’s)..I have made the same error a time or two in my writings also. 😉
Anita counts my haikus and you finding my it’s. It’s like having editors, lol. I love you guys for it too!